Among the evolving
there's a devolution.
There is a siren
wailing the savage
song of loss.
A wave of tension,
that as it strikes
the shore of progress,
emits its high, holy
death rattle.
And oppositional forces,
motivated but unaware
that malignant aspirations
reside in futility,
suffer the universal
tendency toward disorder
as it stands firmly
in opposition of their oppression.
In these final stages,
when the thrash and temper
of humankind reveals itself
in part so ugly, so cold.
Then does the tightening
grip of mortis set in
begging for the decisive blow.
The succor they seek,
the fruit and fallout
of their belligerent designs,
can know no forever,
no perpetual peace.
And like all death throes
before them,
cling as they might,
they will leave behind naught
but the high, holy
death rattle.
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Gosh this poem is good. This particularly speaks to me:
In these final stages,
when the thrash and temper
of humankind reveals itself
in part so ugly, so cold.
Then does the tightening
grip of mortis set in
begging for the decisive blow.
Mother Earth will have her say, and our failure to tend kindly to one another and ultimately to this amazing planet that is our home will no doubt trigger our species’ demise. I cannot envision another end to the human experiment. Sad, that. I hope I’m wrong.
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful words. I appreciate you taking the time to read.
Truthfully, I wrote this poem with an eye towards conjuring two distinct sets of emotions. The first is similar to your interpretation…the other is more positive, yet less often discussed.
Because of the antagonizing nature of societal discourse, it’s easy to see the present as ever closer to the edge of a precipice, but I think it’s also fair to interpret the present as the last gasp (death rattle) of certain malevolent social forces. I see an America that is constantly expanding its notions of tolerance and acceptance, which in many ways is forcing the “death rattle” of regressive movements. The time when things look like their worse is often a precursor to something better.
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You painted with words so well that I could hear a voice as I read and see a city, a people. Thank God for WordPress because poets can appreciate each other here. Chilling, man.
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Thank you so much for the kind words! And, yes, I agree…it’s wonderful to have a place people can go and appreciate artistry. My own (none too humble) goal is to pervade society with poetry as the REFLECTION of deep seated thought, rather than some cryptic means of conveyance. We’ll see how that goes 😉
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You will have that honor. God bless you.
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I’m putting together something expansive that I think you would like. It will take awhile for me to finish, and it may require its own separate page, but it’s something much needed and interesting. Keep an eye on my page from time to time, I’ll make specific reference to it when it’s finished 🙂
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Thank you!! on the edge of my seat, do it!! 🙂
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This is very powerful work! Well done!!
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Thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to read my work. Let’s hope I can produce more to keep your interest.
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a siren
wailing the savage
song of loss
Perfect!
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Thank you! I think it’s apt, in several ways.
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Well played
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That certainly speaks to me. My b-i-l has been given 2-6 months to live now. I know my sister is always listening for that when he sleeps. Sometimes I think it would be better if we didn’t know about such things… Great poem. And thank you, btw, for the follow. I look forward to getting to know you.
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Thank you! I wish your brother in-law as much peace and contentment as possible. I also look forward to looking at more of your work and appreciate the add and thoughtful comment.
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Thank you for taking time to read my haiku and visit by blog. I am trying to figure out how to place a page for regular, or in my case “irregular” poetry.
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Keep producing good work and you will find that place you are looking for. I certainly look forward to reading more 🙂
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I’m honored at your visit to my site. I enjoyed your poem!
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Thank you kindly! I will be visiting more often 🙂
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Wow, I’m grateful for your visit to my blog, because it led me to yours. This is utterly fantastic. This part just gets me-
“In these final stages,
when the thrash and temper
of humankind reveals itself
in part so ugly, so cold.”–
It’s so raw and gritty with truth.
Wonderful!
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Thank you Jessi. I’m glad that you enjoyed the piece…those lines took a lot of deliberation. It’s both pessimistic and optimistic, perhaps I hedged a bit ;). Thank you again and I hope you keep reading.
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As a Brit who voted to remain in the EU in our recent referendum, this really spoke to me. The whole affair has divided our society, and poisoned our political discourse, like nothing else in my lifetime – and nothing has really happened yet. Your lines
And oppositional forces,
motivated but unaware
that malignant aspirations
reside in futility,
suffer the universal
tendency toward disorder
as it stands firmly
in opposition of their oppression.
capture exactly the mood among those in the Leave camp who are now claiming ‘victory’ without realising that quitting the EU won’t address any of the issues they’re so (often justifiably) angry about – or that, in the end, we’ve all lost. Futility indeed. Thanks for sharing this fine work.
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My pleasure friend. While I could not speak intelligently on the Brexit issue, it seems by your words the “leave” camp in Britain is similar to the conservative movement currently floundering in the US. I appreciate you reading and your thoughtful comment.
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The dystopian world in all its angst is portrayed so sublime. Anand Bose from Kerala
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Some of that, certainly. But this is actually more a poem of hope. After all, a death rattle–coming from malevolent forces–is a precursor to death.
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So interesting the juxtaposition of the ‘light’ and ‘dark’ themes. Like it a lot.
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Thank you. I’m glad you picked up on those themes. There’s some negativity/cynicism, but also a lot of positivity in the piece as well.
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Thanks for the follow. As poets our goals are the same but how we perceive the world and it’s idealologies are quite different. You perceive what you wrote as the death rattle of conservative values whereas I perceive it as the death rattle of a progressive movement that is valueless. Poetically speaking then, I guess I agree. Now ain’t that a doozy of an irony.
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You’re welcome for the follow friend, I look forward to perusing more of your work.
As to my poem, if I gave the impression that the death rattle is the death of a “value” system, I did so inadvertently. We’d both likely agree that the term “values” is a loaded one anyway — usually used as a petty rhetorical move to try and grab the moral high ground as quickly as possible. If I have to resort to such terms to feel better about my position, it’s probably weak from jump. Instead, the poem is a reflection on the malevolence that underlies racism, sexism, homophobia and all manner of intolerance masquerading as concern for the well-being of an ENTIRE people. Certainly some conservative positions express this same concern in a forthright and worthwhile manner, but in other respects modern conservative speak merely panders to the lowest common denominator embedded in provincial and short-sighted viewpoints. I sincerely doubt someone who thoughtfully comments on a poem that they feel strikes against their ideology–you, in this instance–actually embraces the bigotry and hatred I’m referencing. Just as I could never describe all conservatives as malevolent, I’m sure you might reconsider the notion of a liberal ideology that, in many ways, seeks to genuinely assist people from all walks of life as “valueless”.
The poem’s intended audience may never read it, given that they are in the death throes of their ideology as they know it. If you consider yourself part of that group, I’m happy you read it, but fear the message is lost. If you are not, I’m also happy you read it and hope that my explanation above suffices to alleviate any ideological biases you may perceive in its composition.
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Was thinking the other day how man has built structures bigger than himself. And that this should be more a matter of concern than pride.
Your poem affirms that belief. 🙂 (Though I should not be smiling)
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I suppose it depends on how you define “structures,” no?
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Yes. Very subjective it is. Thought the outcome is inevitable.
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So how do you define “structures” in this instance??
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Actually what initially came to my mind was the elementary, obvious idea that revolved around concrete, tall structures engineered by man. But after reading Death Rattle I found a more subtle extension of the concept, which is: Our minds have evolved, but they have also become complex; and breeding grounds for even more powerful/wicked/perverse imaginations/desires/prejudices.
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Love this. The emotion of it is incredible.
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Thank you friend. I’m glad the emotion showed through. It’s a topic worth feeling over, as far as I’m concerned.
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Absolutely. Thanks for sharing
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I’ve heard it…the death rattle. It is sorrowful and terrifying together, much as your words that pierce the soul with urgent warning, yet leave the reader contemplating…. As ever my Friend, my mind and heart are shaken by your words and it is Marvelous.
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Thank you! I appreciate your kind words.
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compelling
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I think the grand revelation you were seeking in your “Ok, now” thoughts was just what you wrote about…how there’s a lifetime of expectation, but the reward is based on perspective. There is, in fact, no a-ha moment. Nice work on your blog, I enjoyed reading it.
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I really appreciate those words, thank you friend. Your blog is lovely and I’m reading through and being challenged and stirred up, so thank you again.
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My pleasure 🙂 I’m glad my work moves you.
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Good one. Thanks.
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Thanks for following my blog. I’ll be back to see what else you have written.
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My pleasure friend. Always looking for inspiring work. 🙂
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Welcome to that little voice and thank you for following my blog.
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My pleasure and thank you!
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