There is a moment
after the moment
when all reside
with self.
The excuse that enervates
wanes
under its own gravity.
And all the compulsion
that sells
evaporates
like the joy
of so many fleeting beats.
But this life,
judged always and everywhere
as if chosen,
is not joy in form.
It is the catharsis --
the release of the unwished for
and eternally unbecoming.
Watch even as they wield the grand attempt,
so unobservant where the
passion spreads thickly.
Curses! For the moment
after the moment
when the energy that
enervates dies
its trivial death.
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Philessatry 
Blown away by this poem. It made me feel quite emotional. Exceptionally written. I want to ask what inspired you to make this poem, your meaning behind the words, but I think I ask that often 🙂
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I will happily answer that question, but I would love your interpretation first. What do you think it’s about?
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Reflection ?
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It is a reflection of something, definitely.
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Reflection of how we came into existence 😳
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No subliminal hints to the other readers Jiya….haha.
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Hides 😎
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Okay. You’ll have to bear with me as typing on my mobile isn’t an easy task. The poem is written in third person present, the moment after the “moment” which reflects on the moments that happen after the resonating moments of happiness. The following moment becomes introspective, inside of the “self.” Questioning the excuses that have prevented us from having such moments, but simultaneously these moments drain you. And the feeling of coming back to reality after soaring high. All of the addictions, desires lose intensity and eventually do not last. Interesting “it is catharsis” as life is releasing these repressed emotions “eternally unbecoming” together are quite different to see, but I understand that it could mean the unconscious mind with wishful thinking. Hmm “unwished” is a difficult one, perhaps what you didn’t wish to happen to yourself, but it happened. Where I wondered what you meant was “watch even as they..” I guessed it maybe a facade of some sort that the unobserving and those lacking with passion do. The last stanza “Curses! For the moment after the moment,” is a fitting ending, the sadness for losing that moment where you were energised to do anything. The part that struck a cord in me was “but this life judged always amd everywhere as if chosen, is not joy in form.” As we don’t choose to be born, and in which family or circumstance. It’s as though we are judged in life and beyond thus, it’s not a joyful moment in this moment. I think your meaming is not the same, butI love your poetry<3
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Very interesting indeed. I sent you an email explaining my approach on this piece, check it when you’re able 🙂
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XD I wouldn’t have guessed.
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Perhaps this is about missing the moment and living the next one. Sounds like an early midlife crisis , a sort of self consolation philosophy about after which life was truly chosen ? I love this philosophy in the poem. And the truth that what was unbecoming was the wish of the moment. Very wise as it ends with death , lovely poem .
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Thank you! And I will do my best to deliver some more thoughtful work
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This is a very interesting interpretation and I will comment on it further, but I’m curious how Jiya (another commenter) perceives it as well. Let me get her take and then I’ll address where I was coming from :).
ps, thank you for all the thoughtful comments on my work. I appreciate you taking the time to read, it means a lot to me.
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Reblogged this on Jiya's secret broods.
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You are spontaneously brilliant and lyrical . I love everything I have read till now. Best wishes !
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Those are incredibly kind and generous words. I appreciate them more than you know, truly. Thank you for that.
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Oh, interpretation!
I think what I got out of this is that people think they have choice but they don’t really. They act in the moment, believing that what they have done is out of choice, but on reflection it begins to feel like they were forced into that decision anyway — “the release of the unwished for and eternally unbecoming”. And still, knowing this they like to put on a mask and say they knew what they were doing all along and they CHOSE to do it whilst inside they are a churning of emotions — “the grand attempt as unobservant the passion spreads thickly”. And what once fed the fire of passion to act dwindles away to nothing because you believe you had no choice after all.
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You’re definitely on the trail of some themes I was considering while writing it. It’s always fascinating seeing what moves people or seeing what they see when reading a piece. Thank you for sharing, I appreciate you taking the time. 🙂
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It was my pleasure, I assure you. 🙂
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I’m caught in a dilemma after reading this. A part of me wants to feel that nameless feeling you get when you read something of this quality. On the other hand, after reading this I realized I still have a long way to go and that’s always…I should say, a humbling feeling. Either ways I thank you.
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Those are kind words indeed and I appreciate you reading. If the work makes you feel anything at all than I suppose its done its job.
If it serves as some sort of inspiration, that’s awesome….but it’s not reflective of how far you have to go. Be true to your experiences in your work and it’ll have a genuine influence in the world at large. Thanks for reading, can’t wait to check out more of your work.
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I think actually, it is about the moment, and perhaps that regret …
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Regret is a strong word, but it can imply many things. There’s regret, in a sense, in this poem.
I appreciate your thoughtful comments and interpretation.
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Absolutely Amazing Phil. My mind spun, then engaged, then spun, dumbstruck, but considering. I think I have to Think about this one a great deal more to unravel its complexity and many layers. Bravo, Sir!
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Ahhh….So you will take a moment to consider the moment after the moment? Sounds fair to me! 😉
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Momentous Moments are Moments after the Moment worth taking a Moment to muse 😉
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It was in such moments that I teased out this work!
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